The feeling that I have is a problem for you
because I can't stop thinking about you
but that is why I keep waiting for you
every time I get rejected by you,
It is made so it cannot be in between
but yet it changes by each and every scene
and by being in every of my dreams
it is not as different as it seems.
I like this poem, it's short but ind of powerful. Your grammer is good and it's cool that it all rhymes.
ReplyDeleteThe poem could be longer.
ReplyDeleteThere are some improvements that can be made. There are some grammar issues in your poem that needs to be fix. All in all, a good poem.
ReplyDeleteThe flow of the poem is good.
ReplyDeleteThe poem is has feeling that comes from the heart.